3. Birds can be heard and the bustle of students going from Ford to the main campus.
This sentence is awkward, because it isn't really specifying what is going on with the bustle of students. There is really no verb describing that part of the sentence.
Revised:
Birds and the bustle of students going from Ford to the main campus can be heard.
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